I especially love the sequence in which the egg-
birds mob poor Koryuu.  A very impressive start.  
All I'd suggest (and you can do this as you go) 
is more comments on the cels.  But then once I 
start talking about my cels I have to be tasered 
and maced to get me to stop ... so don't use my 
gallery as a model!  But a couple of comments on 
each would make your gallery a nice place to 
wander around for awhile.